We Steal From Children - Short Film

[alicelikesme]

My friends and I just finished this for a 48 hour film contest.
Along with writing and acting in it, I did all the editing, and as I'm always looking for constructive criticism, I would greatly appreciate your feedback.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=_S-R6XHdtA8

[nealbonn]

I really enjoyed it. The filming quality was not great, but it was a good effort.

[alicelikesme]

Originally Posted by nealbonn

I really enjoyed it. The filming quality was not great, but it was a good effort.

Thank you! By filming quality do you mean the way in which we filmed it, or the picture quality? Both of which admittedly have issues.

[masterevilace]

the acting was a bit bad at times.. such as the awkwardly long moments of rolling around on the floor together. but that is forgivable. I love the concept of stealing from children, and would have liked to see more of that. Maybe even an overly dramatic filming of the children getting robbed, where the robbers are acting like children and the children are acting like adults (ok take it, just don't hurt me type of stuff)

The first half of the short seemed great, the second half was throwaway. There wasn't a lot of stuff happening off of each other. Such as the guy in the bathroom wouldn't come out. His friend was about to get raped, and suddenly he says "ok i'll come out".. there was really no reason for him to come out, especially after handing the condom under the door (which was funny).. it just felt like a lot of it was random.

The guy with glasses was really good in this. He felt real, and seemed to have a very unique personality.

Overall I enjoyed it. Especially if it was done in just two days

[alicelikesme]

Originally Posted by masterevilace

the acting was a bit bad at times.. such as the awkwardly long moments of rolling around on the floor together. but that is forgivable. I love the concept of stealing from children, and would have liked to see more of that. Maybe even an overly dramatic filming of the children getting robbed, where the robbers are acting like children and the children are acting like adults (ok take it, just don't hurt me type of stuff)

The first half of the short seemed great, the second half was throwaway. There wasn't a lot of stuff happening off of each other. Such as the guy in the bathroom wouldn't come out. His friend was about to get raped, and suddenly he says "ok i'll come out".. there was really no reason for him to come out, especially after handing the condom under the door (which was funny).. it just felt like a lot of it was random.

The guy with glasses was really good in this. He felt real, and seemed to have a very unique personality.

Overall I enjoyed it. Especially if it was done in just two days

Thanks so much for the feedback, I really appreciate it. It helps a lot.

I COMPLETELY agree with the horrid fight scene, that's been a big issue with most of the people who've watched it. We also desperately wanted to have real kids at the lemonade stand, but we're all away at college and didn't know anyone who was even under 18.

And thank you so much for the comment about the guy with the glasses, that was actually me, so it made my day!